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Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, advertisement is all around us, from leaflets that we occasionally receive walking across streets to
advertisements
 that pop up on websites. For some may it may be a way to be introduced to something new, while others may think it is misleading.
To begin
 with,
advertisements
 can be argued to be beneficial for companies as they allow startups to increase their exposure in the public’s eye. Some argue that through publicity we can better understand the benefits of a
product
 and make the correct decision.
For example
, when a cosmetic brand advertises its latest foundation, it would emphasise the strength of its
product
.
Such
 as the ability to cover up dark circles, by stating the characteristics of their
product
,
it
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allows consumers to choose carefully and make the smartest choice.
In addition
,
advertisements
borden
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broaden
 our horizons, through adverts we could develop our understanding
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 current trends, as well as
discovering
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 new goods and services available in the market.
On the other hand
, some argued that
advertisements
 are misleading, and
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 the
causality
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for
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 irrational choices.
For instance
, companies may exaggerate the benefits of specific products. One example would be dietary products. Firms may emphasise the regular intake of the dietary
product
 within a week allows consumers to lose more than 2 kg.
However
, in
reality
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 it is impossible and unhealthy to experience a sudden drop in weight within
in
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a short period of time.
Nevertheless
, the side effects of dietary products are usually avoided
on
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the
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advertisement.
As a result
, consumers may be misled to believe that there are no side effects, which poses a risk
on
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the
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 health. In conclusion,
although
advertisements
 may be beneficial in terms of introducing us to the latest items, misleading
advertisements
 may lead to the waste of money or worse, health issues.
Hence
, the drawbacks of
advertisements
 overtake its strength.
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