You have organised on 19th birthday party for your relative and invited elderly gas. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel Manager, to provide the feedback: in your letter, you should tell: - when the party took place - why it was successful - thanks for staff member who was really helpful.

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Dear manager of

Shreton

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Sheraton

Hotel, I hope

this

letter finds you well. I am writing

this

letter to appreciate your help during our stay

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Hawaii. We had a good time

last

weekend as I just celebrated my 19th

birthday

at the hotel. We decided to organise a

birthday

party here because of many recommendations from my friends. A large majority of them highly appraised the service provided by it as they believe it is incomparable. My

birthday

party took place at a high-end restaurant where most staff are friendly and helpful. I still remember when my dad fell to the ground by an accident, many waiters extended their hands to help him. Some of them drove him to the hospital while others tried their best to maintain the order. Once again, I want to thank all the polite and warm-hearted personnel who are involved in organising my

birthday

party. They are amazing and brilliant. I must say it is a memorable day for me and I feel great honour to spend the night with them. May all of you have a bright future and healthy life. Best regards Clarence Peng

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