Some people think that the role of parent is to discipline their children and teach them about right and wrong. Other people consider that the main responsibility of parents is to nature their children and provide them with a safe environment to grow up in. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays many
people
consider their
kids
which means they think juniors should be disciplined about what is wrong and what is the right thing to be influenced by their
parents
. while others mention their
children
should get a safe environment to become adults by their guardians. in my
opinion
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children
are getting the role of discipline amount of their ages. As long as your pupils do not that generous or kind it would get hard to find friends or teamwork. In
this
essay, I intend to discuss both these views. on the
one
hand, the legal guardian usually teaches their young
ones
without hardness and tiredness for discipline. Put more simply,
parents
teach their
children
some basic things about greeting other
people
whatever who they are and what they do. As a ,result their loved
ones
are more respectful to their awareness of other
people
.
one
of the perfect examples of
this
is my friend's child always be respectful and be kind to her awareness which means my friend always chatting with her young
one
about the instructive stories and interesting life hacks without any harness that's why she loved
one
will be being respectful and good Harrison adult in the future.
Therefore
, I personally agree with
this
statement.
On the other hand
, some
parents
never influenced
their
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young
ones
they just want their
children
who are being adults by themselves and their own character by nature.
That is
to say that their
kids
are being bad harm to other
people
who their uncle aunt and without respect.
Consequently
, young
ones
get bad habits
such
as never doing their homework or small detail their home staff
also
smoking or involved in some crime.
One
of the good examples of
this
is when
i
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watch the news in
last
month
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crime in NWS which is about junior year
kids
killed each other by knife. The main reason was that
kids
are not only drinking alcohol but
also
effective for some high drug addictive. A policeman said about their
parents
never taking care of their pity
children
which is why
one
of the
children
had already been killed at a funeral and
one
of the
kids
will go to jail.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
view. By way of conclusion, There are two kinds of legal guardian
one
of them want to discipline their
children
while the other
do
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not.
Therefore
I recommended that all
of
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the
parents
should be responsible take care of their loved
ones
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discipline
  • Morality
  • Ethics
  • Values
  • Respect
  • Boundaries
  • Safety
  • Nurture
  • Emotional needs
  • Physical needs
  • Bond
  • Communication
  • Active listening
  • Independence
  • Decision-making
  • Responsibility
  • Accountability
  • Guidance
  • Support
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