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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government ‘s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Modernization of the world has affected the environment in many negative aspects across the globe. As responsible
humans
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 believe that caring for
nature
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 is the responsibility of the governing bodies, while another party of
humans
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 think it is a personal responsibility too. In
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the above two views and my opinion on the above.
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, as the governments have the final ruling authority over world events,
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 they should be able to identify and
control
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 the factors that harm
nature
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 and take the necessary
action
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.
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, the people elect the parliament with the suitable people to implement policies and take necessary
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. If the necessary
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 is not taken there will not be any
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 of the global events creating catastrophes. For example, the increase in the global temperature and increase in the sea level.
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, it is the ruling party's authority to take steps to
control
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 damages to
nature
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 and protect it.
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, as
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 are part of the natural system it is our moral duty to extend our support in protecting biodiversity.
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, the governments impose the rules and regulations if the civilians are not responsible there will be no safety for
nature
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.
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, it is the people's responsibility to
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 the use of vehicles when there is global warming.
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, everyone should extend support to protect the environment. To conclude, two parties of
humans
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 think that the government or civilians should be responsible separately for the environmental protection, I think both parties should act and take
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 to save
nature
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.
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