Some people say that protecting the environment is the government ‘s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Modernization of the world has affected the environment in many negative aspects across the globe. As responsible
humans
believe that caring for
nature
is the responsibility of the governing bodies, while another party of
humans
think it is a personal responsibility too. In
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the above two views and my opinion on the above.
Firstly
, as the governments have the final ruling authority over world events,
hence
they should be able to identify and
control
the factors that harm
nature
and take the necessary
action
.
Furthermore
, the people elect the parliament with the suitable people to implement policies and take necessary
action
. If the necessary
action
is not taken there will not be any
control
of the global events creating catastrophes. For example, the increase in the global temperature and increase in the sea level.
Therefore
, it is the ruling party's authority to take steps to
control
damages to
nature
and protect it.
Secondly
, as
humans
are part of the natural system it is our moral duty to extend our support in protecting biodiversity.
Although
, the governments impose the rules and regulations if the civilians are not responsible there will be no safety for
nature
.
For instance
, it is the people's responsibility to
control
the use of vehicles when there is global warming.
Thus
, everyone should extend support to protect the environment. To conclude, two parties of
humans
think that the government or civilians should be responsible separately for the environmental protection, I think both parties should act and take
action
to save
nature
.
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