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Today many people frequently change their jobs. What problems does it create? How to solve them?

#people #change #jobs
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era
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 it has been noticed that
public
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 is immediately shifting from one place of work to another in a very short period of time. Development is leading to a vast area for various job sectors which includes technology,
industrail
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industrial
 revolution and many more.
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 it is evident that the major reason for resignation is job satisfaction in relation to the community. The criteria
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 enlisted with
pay
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the pay
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 scale, working hours and other facilities
also
. Due to
this
 it is
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somehow
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some how
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somehow
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aheading
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heading
a heading
ahead
 towards
unsability
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usability
 in personal as
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well
 as in the professional life of
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society
.
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 it is
demoilishing
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demolishing
 the economy and soul growth
also
. The
ways
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this
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issue
isssue
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issue
 can be solved is by providing job satisfaction to the people. It can be achieved by taking certain decisions which
comprises
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 of
ehanching
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enhancing
changing
 the salaries ,
flexibile
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flexible
 working hours and
also
 by introducing new amenities like game section or library in the office. If all these
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strategies
stratagies
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strategies
 are kept in mind it will surely lead to
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a reduction
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the
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 resignation rate.
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