In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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The number of people eating a lot of junk foods increases in some countries,
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they start having health issues. I strongly disagree with the idea of the government making that kind of
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more expensive. All of us have become very comfortable with
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way we live,
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our daily lives are busier than before.
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most of the workers don’t have enough time to prepare
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or are simply lazier.
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, it is not the government’s right to impose a higher tax on fast
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of all, if
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people’s
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to get higher and due to
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alters, there is a possibility that other products could become more costly.
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,
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instead
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of putting that pressure on regular lives, the authorities could
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facilities,
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parks and gyms and encourage
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lifestyle as well by putting signs around and producing more
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, including the topic. That way citizens would pay more attention and maybe follow these ideas for their better good. Overall, fast
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industries’ clients are getting more due to the world’s
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economy and people stop paying attention to their well-being,
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I am not agreeing with the proposal for putting a bigger tax on
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I believe there are some better options that will not control others’ wills and would be better for the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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