In many countries more and more young people are leaving school but unable to find jobs. What problems do you think youth unemployment causes for individuals and the society? What measures should be taken to reduce the level of unemployment among youngsters ?

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school
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essay will discuss the causes and possible solutions to
this
problem. Youth unemployment has
caused
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by numerous
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triggers and misunderstandings that trace their origins
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bak
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to elementary
school
.
Firstly
,
this
is
misinterpretation
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of elementary priorities by parents.
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,
inability
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to explain to
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child
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the need
of
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completed education,in order to be properly trained for making a decision about their profession and be ready to deal with it may cause a number of unpleasant consequences,
such
as
development
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of frivolity and arrogance.
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,is that the impact of society
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my
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also
play a significant role in
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of dropping
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school
.
This
means that teenagers are very susceptible to influence from outside, usually not guided by facts and arguments but more by preference or majority. In comparison, individuals and governments might make a difference in
this
laborious situation. One solution is parental guidance for the youth. Parents should encourage their children to finish
school
,
hence
,to personally take place in the future. Governments should
also
help in reducing teenage unemployment by opening more jobs for them.
For instance
, local units should provide young people with proper vacancies not only during summer breaks
,
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but throughout the year.
This
could not only help in increasing their motivation,but
also
to decide what they want to do in the future during
this
working time. To conclude,unemployment among
the
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minors could be a challenge that could affect
societies
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performance. Strategies, both by parents and
government
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the government

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are worth
to try
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to help eliminate
this
issue.
Nevertheless
,the goal is to help individuals and the nation to overcome
this
widespread dilemma.
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