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Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people argue that
government
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 in sorting out
housing
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the housing
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 shortage in
cities
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 led to several social problems. While I agree
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 sentiment in general, it is important to understand the limits of state intervention on
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 issue. I will discuss my reasons in
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 with, there are several factors behind housing problems in many countries. Foremost, the increase in population in some
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 a direct impact on
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 situation.
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, the limited resources available in
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with
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the increase in demand.
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, it is the duty of the state to find solutions to
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, in order to minimize social consequences. A good example
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 is health officials can take steps to encourage couples to have family plans that do not become a burden to the city, they live in.
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, the
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 can implement efficient housing schemes in their countries with the help of international agencies.
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, there are other parties that can solve these issues effectively.
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, media professionals have a bigger role to play in
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situation. Actually, they can assist public health officials to educate people on family planning by promoting several programmes in
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, certain
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government
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 agencies can provide additional funds to authorities to build appropriate housing complexes in populated
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, academic professionals can help the state to
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planning
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 of
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 housing projects in
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environmental
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 friendly way. In conclusion, it is clear that
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 of
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 agencies can be easily overcome by
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 as media and academic communities to overcome housing shortages in a country.
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 reminds us of
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 responsibilities towards society as well.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban planning
  • policies
  • funding
  • private sector
  • community organizations
  • public-private partnerships
  • innovative solutions
  • market demands
  • financially viable
  • socioeconomic factors
  • income inequality
  • migration
  • urbanization
  • concerted efforts
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