Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people argue that
government
can get
involve
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in sorting out
housing
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the housing

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shortage in
cities
which
has
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have

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led to several social problems. While I agree
to
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with

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this
sentiment in general, it is important to understand the limits of state intervention on
this
issue. I will discuss my reasons in
this
essay.
To begin
with, there are several factors behind housing problems in many countries. Foremost, the increase in population in some
cities
have
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a direct impact on
this
situation.
Consequently
, the limited resources available in
cities
such
as land, water and food availability
does
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do

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not
matched
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with
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the increase in demand.
Therefore
, it is the duty of the state to find solutions to
this
, in order to minimize social consequences. A good example
,
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is health officials can take steps to encourage couples to have family plans that do not become a burden to the city, they live in.
On the other hand
, the
government
can implement efficient housing schemes in their countries with the help of international agencies.
However
, there are other parties that can solve these issues effectively.
For instance
, media professionals have a bigger role to play in
this
kind of
a
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situation. Actually, they can assist public health officials to educate people on family planning by promoting several programmes in
this
regard.
Moreover
, certain
charity
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charities

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and
non
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non-government

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government
agencies can provide additional funds to authorities to build appropriate housing complexes in populated
cities
.
In addition
, academic professionals can help the state to
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the planning

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planning
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plan

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of
such
housing projects in
more
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a more

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environmental
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friendly way. In conclusion, it is clear that
limitations
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the limitations

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of
government
agencies can be easily overcome by
third
parties
such
as media and academic communities to overcome housing shortages in a country.
This
question
,
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reminds us of
citizen's
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responsibilities towards society as well.
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