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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local foods is environmentally and economically beneficial. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Due to the development of technology, we live in an era of globalization. A large amount of foodstuff we eat every day is actually imported
that is
 shipped from far away.
However
, people still consist that eating local
food
 is environmentally and economically beneficial. I would agree with
this
 statement, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, local
food
 tastes better. Because that foodstuff is locally produced and is only shipped to the local markets;
thus
, it is still fresh and nutritious.
On the other hand
, that imported foodstuff is transported from miles away and is horned in warehouses for days. According to some statistical figures, vegetables will lose 50% of their nutrition within 24-48 hours after they are harvested.
Therefore
, locally produced
food
 is healthier and more recognizable.
Second
, locally produced
food
 is more environmentally friendly. As we know, different transportations, like trains and cars, are required to carry imported
food
;
hence
, the carbon emissions will be increased during the transporting and packaging processes.
As a result
, the growth in carbon emissions can contribute to global warming.
On the contrary
, if we could consume more locally produced
food
,
then
 the environment would be better protected.
Third
, The local infrastructure can be improved. We can invest the money we earn from consuming local
food
 to promote the local infrastructure,
such
 as farms and some basic equipment.
Such
 a case is actually a win-win situation, the locals can use more advanced equipment, and we can eat more delicious
food
. In conclusion, eating locally produced
food
 has numerous advantages.
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