Some people believe that studying in a college or university is the best way for students to prepare for their future careers. Others think they should leave school as soon as possible to develop their career through work experience. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is true that some people
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believe that
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a college
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or university education is important to prepare for their future whereas opponents believe that they should leave school and develop work
experience
. In my point of view, I believe that gaining academic knowledge and
experience
is both equally important for a successful future and
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explain
why.
Firstly
, when pupils complete their academic
qualifications
it is easy for them to land
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their dream
job
because in order to get jobs in certain fields
such
as IT, medical and engineering educational
qualifications
are
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compulsory
compulsary
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compulsory
.
For instance
, to become a surgeon, completion of seven
years
of studies is
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compulsory
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compulsory
and no exceptions can be made.
Therefore
,
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academic
acadmeic
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academic
knowledge is vital for
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succeed
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in the future
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career-wise
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career wise
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.
On the other hand
, gaining
experience
is equally important because a person can get a better
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understanding
undestanding
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understanding
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the
job
or the role they have to perform according to their
experience
.
For example
, handymen
such
as plumbers,
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and carpenters
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require
experience
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than the
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theoretical
knowldge
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knowledge
to work better and so are the artists, musicians and dancers.
As a result
, one of the important
job
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to climb up the corporate ladder is the
experience
gained
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through
throughout
thought
throught
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through
the
years
as a person who is experienced will perform a better
job
than one with no working background.
However
, when a person does not have any educational background related to the field it will take them
years
to get to
a
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their desired position. To exemplify, if someone is applying for a higher
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management
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position they will require both academic
qualifications
related to the
job
as well as
years
of
experience
. In conclusion, I believe that both academic and
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educational
educatonal
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educational
qualifications
are equally important for students to develop and succeed
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career
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as
ceratin
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certain
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jobs require
theoritical
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theoretical
knowldge
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knowledge
whereas some require academic and
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most students nowadays complete
studies
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their studies
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and work simultaneously.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic foundation
  • specific knowledge
  • qualifications
  • valuable resources
  • experienced faculty
  • deeper insights
  • strong networks
  • industries
  • internships
  • placement opportunities
  • career guidance
  • smoother entry
  • job market
  • practical skills
  • hands-on knowledge
  • job-ready
  • trades and professions
  • financial independence
  • student loans
  • educational expenses
  • real-world experience
  • career goals
  • aspirations
  • working conditions
  • informed career decisions
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