Some people participate in extra‐curricular activities such as volunteering in charitable events or joining dance groups to gain more knowledge and experience. Others simply focus on their goals such as academic studies or work. Which do you think helps in improving a person’s knowledge and experience and why?

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IN SPITE OF HAVING ADVANTAGES OF BOTH INSTITUTIONAL AND

NONACADENIC

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NONACADEMIC

NON-ACADEMIC

LEARNING PROCESS,

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IT IS

POTANTIAL

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POTENTIAL

FOR PUPILS TO ACHIEVE KNOWLEDGE FROM ACADEMIC COURSE. SOME PEOPLE ARGUE THAT

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ONLY ACADEMIC EDUCATION CAN REACH THE STUDENTS TO THEIR GOALS, EXTRA CURRICULAR

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TOPIC WHERE I

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BETWEEN A ROCK AND A HARD PLACE,

AFTERALL

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AFTER ALL

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I OPINE THAT YOUNGSTERS SHOULD BE QUALIFIED FOR

FUTURE

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BY RECEIVING PROPER LESSONS FROM EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTES. THE SPAN OF

LIFE

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IS TOO SHORT, HERE AS WE CAN ENGAGE

PLENTY

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OF ACTIVITIES TO BE HAPPY.

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OF ALL, EVERYONE HAVE TO BE COMPETENT TO DO SIGNIFICANT TASK BY GATHERING PEDAGOGICAL CAPACITY. AND IT OBVIOUSLY

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OCCURRED

OCCURED

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OCCURRED

BY INSTITUTES NOT ANY CHARITY ORGANIZATIONS. SINCE NO ONE CAN PLAY

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ROLE

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MANKIND OR

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OTHER RECREATIONAL PERFORMANCES.

FOR INSTANCE

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, WE OBSERVED MOST OF THE CELEBRITIES BECOME SUCCESSFUL IN

LIFE

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BY GATTING EXPERIENCES FROM ANY DEFINITE SYLLABUS. WE CAN

MANTION

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MENTION

THE NAME OF DR MUHAMMAD YOUNUS, THE

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FROM BANGLADESH. IN EARLY HE EQUIPT WITH RESOURCES AND

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FOR MANKIND.

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INVOLVED

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IN EXTRA-CURRICULAR PROGRAMS IN THE

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EARLY

EARLLY

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EARLY

STAGE OF

LIFE

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THEY

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CAN GATHER PLENTY OF EXPERIENCE BUT THOSE WILL NOT

SUSTAINABLE

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FOR

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LONG RUN THEY WILL SUFFER MUCH FOR THEIR STUPIDITY. WHEN THEY HAVE BEING IN SPORTS

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, WHEREAS OTHERS WARE IN CAMPUS, WHICH MAKE THEM ENOUGH CONFIDENT AS WELL AS CREATIVE . THEY RUN FOR TEMPORARY SUCCESSES.

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, MOST OF OUR ACTORS AND FILM BOSSES HAVE BEEN GAINING SEVERAL THINGS, BUT THEY ARE SUFFERING FROM

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COMPLEX. IN CONCLUSION, IN RAIN AND SHINE EVERYONE SHOULD BE DREAMED TO BE SUCCESS IN

LIFE

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. IT IS

UNDOUBETELY

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UNDOUBTEDLY

PROVED THAT STUDENTS PRIME PRIORITY TO EARN BASICS FROM SCHOOLS AND

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DO OTHER ACTIVITIES.

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