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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary productsshiuld be expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many produced food and drink goods involve
high
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amount
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 of
sugar
 which can have terrible impacts on health. Sugary
products
 should be made more exclusive than
the
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in the
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 olden days so that
people
 will consume less
sugar
. I totally agree with the statement for many important reasons.
To begin
 with about
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people
 do not seriously care about the drawbacks of the things if they are not expensive enough to purchase
them
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.
People
 consume the
sugar
 without thinking too much
whether
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about whether
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 it is necessary to use
or
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 not. Whenever they manufacture some
products
, they apply approximately 80%
of
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the
sugar
 as the main components. Because
,
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 the price of the
sugar
 is cheap as well as they misunderstand that applying too much
sugar
 can make their
products
 tasty as well as delicious.
Secondly
, making the sugary goods more exclusive can make
people
to
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pay attention
on
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 the
consuming
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 limit
of
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the
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sugar
. In the past years, they are not restricted to purchase
the
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sugar
products
 because the price was too cheap to buy.
For example
, children eat
the
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candies as
their
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both snacks or suppers. If there are constraints in eating sugary goods,
people
 will have a better healthy life. Only if the price of the sugary
products
rocketing
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, they will realize the disadvantages of eating sugary
products
 without no limit. In conclusion,
people
 consider
about
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their finance even though they do not care about their health.
Therefore
, I obviously agree with the statements for the reasons that I mentioned above.
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