Some people belive that the most fitness and strongest person and team can achive great success in sport, other belive that sucess depends on mental attitude.

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Sports is a field where

fitness

and toughness are necessary for every

player

,on the other ,hand mental

fitness

also

compulsory for tekal with opposite

team

player

. I strongly

belive

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believe

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that for sports

team

or players both things are necessary to get

desired

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the desired

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goal.

To begin

with, physical strength and good stamina is a beggest weapon of a

sportman

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sportsman

also

a high amount of energy

required

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is required

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for a stand long time in the

game

. If any

player

gets exhausted in-

gameth

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games

game

, it will affect all

team

members and it leads to

demotivate

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demotivating

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the

team

member

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and

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also

, effect the winning ability.

Furthermore

, height and muscles which indicate the

fitness

of a

sportman

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sportsman

sportsmen

shows

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show

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that a person can play the

game

in any situation or condition.

Also

, their

fitness

helps them to bounce back from any crucial condition and get

desired

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the desired

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goal.

Likewise

, mental

fitness

also

that much important for

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a sportsperson

the sportsperson

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sportsperson

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sportspeople

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. Because it will change the scenario of

game

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the game

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For example

in wrestling if

competitor

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a competitor

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player

shows their mental level to another playeathlete he/she confidently

lose

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loses

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the match but if they do not a

player

will never come out

that

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with that

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expression on their face how much pain they have and because of that level of toughness another

player

sometimes demotivate and other one get the chance and win the

game

. In conclusion,

the

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apply

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physical shape and strength

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are

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necessary but the appropriate mindset will increase the chance of

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apply

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the

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them

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winning the

game

.So, physical

fitness

and mental toughness are required to

becoming

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become

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a good

player

or good

player

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4Word repetition
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21Grammar mistakes
 

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256 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people belive that the most fitness and strongest person and team can achive great success in sport, other belive that sucess depends on mental attitude.

Fully explain your ideas

People who buy friendly vehicles like electric cars should receive a subsidy on tax. This will discourage people from buying polluting cars and thus lower emissions. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Since the beginning of the 20th century, the number of endangered species has increased significantly and we have witnessed more mass extinctions in this period than in any other period of time. State some reasons for this and provide possible solutions.

Governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move from large cities to regional areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?