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Some people belive that the most fitness and strongest person and team can achive great success in sport, other belive that sucess depends on mental attitude.

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Sports is a field where
fitness
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 and toughness are necessary for every
player
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,on the other ,hand mental
fitness
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 is
also
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 compulsory for tekal with opposite
team
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 or
player
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. I strongly
belive
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believe
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 that for sports
team
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 or players both things are necessary to get
desired
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the desired
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 goal.
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 with, physical strength and good stamina is a beggest weapon of a
sportman
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sportsman
.
also
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 a high amount of energy
required
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 for a stand long time in the
game
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. If any
player
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 gets exhausted in-
gameth
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games
game
, it will affect all
team
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 members and it leads to
demotivate
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 the
team
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 member
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and
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also
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, effect the winning ability.
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, height and muscles which indicate the
fitness
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 of a
sportman
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sportsman
sportsmen
shows
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show
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 that a person can play the
game
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 in any situation or condition.
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, their
fitness
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 helps them to bounce back from any crucial condition and get
desired
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the desired
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 goal.
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, mental
fitness
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 is
also
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 that much important for
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a sportsperson
the sportsperson
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sportsperson
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sportspeople
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. Because it will change the scenario of
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game
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the game
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.
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 in wrestling if
competitor
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a competitor
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player
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 shows their mental level to another playeathlete he/she confidently
lose
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loses
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 the match but if they do not a
player
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 will never come out
that
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with that
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 expression on their face how much pain they have and because of that level of toughness another
player
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 sometimes demotivate and other one get the chance and win the
game
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. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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physical shape and strength
is
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are
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 necessary but the appropriate mindset will increase the chance of
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apply
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the
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them
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 winning the
game
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.So, physical
fitness
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 and mental toughness are required to
becoming
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become
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 a good
player
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 or good
player
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