Some people think that it is good to raise children in a city. Others argue that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside.

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There are some
people
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who side with the notion of upbringing
children
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in urban areas, while some argue that
countryside
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the countryside
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is
better
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place in terms of youngster rearing. Cities with their better amenities can be an optimal place, whereas villages surrounded by pure nature are more
favorable
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for
child raising
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child-raising
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. It is true that urban areas are known for their wide range of facilities for various fields. Take education as an example, which plays an essential part in the life of young
people
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. In turn, there might not be professional teachers in every part of the cities but there are a lot of far
better equipped
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schools with technical resources for
children
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's
advantages
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. Studying in comfortable places and being able to use most technical facilities lead youngsters to acquire knowledge faster. When it comes to the countryside, it is mostly free from various
pullutions
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pollutions
which can be detrimental to all
people
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.
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children
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have fewer chances for better education they are less likely to be afflicted by exhausted fumes.
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, conditions in rural areas make
children
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more endurable to many unexpected situations in the future. Because villages are virtually not comfortable enough in many spheres,
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why having lived under harsher conditions young
people
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when
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who
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they
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apply
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grow up, easily adapt to most
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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conditions. In conclusion,
city
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the city
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is good
for
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with its facilities, while I think
countryside
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the countryside
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, where is free from pollution,
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where
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which
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is free from pollution is an ideal place for
child raising
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child-raising
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