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The culture and traditions are changing from generation to generation. Why is it happening? What can be done to change it?

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Ostensibly, a huge difference in the transition of cultural and traditional
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 among different
generations
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 is being easily observed in society. There are multifarious reasons why
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changes
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 occur
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in the form of
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the influence
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 of social media and pressure of study and profession.
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 essay will delve deeper into these causes and provide essential measures to change
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. With the impact of advanced technology and social media, new
generations
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 may not incline
towards
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 cultural and traditional
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.
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, a painstaking survey conducted by The Guardian Newspaper in March
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 2015 revealed that new
generations
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 had been feeling less importance for tradition and customs in them since they adopted the new lifestyle according to the new scientific era.
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, they may not feel comfortable
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following these old social rules.
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,
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 shift of transitional and cultural information has drastically deteriorated among
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 which is an important issue for new
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 to come across their cultural information.
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, due to
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 of authenticated sources,
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changes
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 are very common in
generations
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.
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, in order to resist the
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, numerous essential measures can be adopted. Primarily, educational institutions can add a separate subject in studies about cultural and traditional
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 which can help upcoming
generations
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 to acquire the information regarding these with no extra effort.
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, if governments assist galleries and museums financially, they can come up with lectures and seminars depicting customs and traditions along with visual effects and
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 may be helpful to impart the exact meaning of these. To conclude, it is unequivocal that though there are numerous reasons behind a continuous change in
generations
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 regarding culture and traditions, the measures
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 as adding the
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 of these in syllabus and campaigns to enlighten new
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 can certainly hinder
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changes
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