students should pay in full cost of their own university studies rather than have free higher education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disgree with this opinion?

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It is irrefutable fact that a vast majority of pupils ponder that
government
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should bear all the expenditure for providing tertiary
education
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to
students
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. While
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government
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should assist in
study
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expenses
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but I firmly believe that it is
responsibility
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of
students
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to manage all the
expenses
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own selves
instead
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of depending on
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. To commence with views of disagreements,
state
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ought to bear
expenses
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to alleviate illiteracy from the root level. To elaborate
it
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, it is often seen that
low income
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families can not bear the cost of university
education
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in
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cases, they deprive
from
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the
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education
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and
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may lead to
illiteracy
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an illiteracy
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society.
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,
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government
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the government
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should take stern steps to reduce illiteracy by providing free
education
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to
low level
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classes. Moving towards with the
agreements
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views that if pupils pay
higher
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a higher
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fee
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fees
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to achieve holistic
education
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from 
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institutions and
then
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they would have greater interest
regarding
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their career outcomes. To explain it, if they are provided
education
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without paying anything and in
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cases they are not worried about money
that is
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provided by
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.
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, they will not pay attention
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seeking job opportunities because they feel that there is no need
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money whether establishing
own
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business or doing
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the job
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.
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, a survey conducted by the
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government
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in 2015 revealed that in which countries
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government
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governments
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pay
all
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for all
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the expenditure
of
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on
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study
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studies
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and the unemployment rate is on the high level in these countries.
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, scholars bear own selves their
study
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expenses
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so that the burden from the
government
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's shoulders.
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Furthermore
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,
this
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practice leads to bad habits.
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,
students
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will not have
burden
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return of money to their parents. In
such
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situations, they can follow the astray path by indulging in bad habits.
for example
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, if
students
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pay themselves for achieving higher
education
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and
therefore
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they sometimes start part-job with along
study
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. They can support financially to their parents and
also
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help to contribute
in
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the growth of
economy
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.
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, by acquiring paid
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they can become responsible citizens
at
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in
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the adolescence age. In conclusion, while
the
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free
education
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has
paramount
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role for those who are living under
poverty
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line.
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, paid
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not only
generate
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job opportunities but
also
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become
students
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well-disciplined
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well disciplined
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citizens.
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