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The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniably true that
parents
 play a significant role in bringing up a
child
. Some people believe that
both
 the
parents
 should be evenly responsible for the upbringing of their
children
. In my point of view, I partly agree with
this
 idea on
some
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 following grounds. On the one hand,
both
 the
parents
 don’t always have
the
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 equal amount of available time to be with their offspring.
For instance
, if the
child
 needs help with his homework in the evening and the father is required to work late,
then
 the mother will be the one
who
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in charge of helping her
child
 do his homework.
Consequently
, there is always a person spending more time with their
children
more
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than the others.
On the other hand
, if the
children
 are brought up by
both
parents
, they will develop more comprehensively. What they learn from one is different from another. Specifically, if a
child
 is raised only by the mother, he tends to become emotional towards most things.
However
, if the
child
 is brought up only by the father, he would follow everything through his logic and show no emotion at all.
In addition
, if
both
parents
 share the duty of raising their
child
, it can create a happy family environment which
have
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 a great impact on the
children
, making them more optimistic and happier.
Consequently
, they will love
both
 the
parents
 equally as the
children
 often show great
affections
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to
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 the person interacting with them frequently. All in all,
both
 the father and the mother should raise their kid responsibly whenever they can as the
children
 are the people who will change the world in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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