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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is impossible to deny that there are some individuals who are comfortable with doing the same thing for the rest of their lives and
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avoid
change
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.
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, there are some
people
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 who believe that
change
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 is good all the time. I am going to discuss
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 essay and give my opinion at the end. In
this
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world
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things
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 are moving so fast so are habits and goals. Many individuals simply work their lives doing common activities to avoid risk. I would like to say
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of
people
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 are indifferent, they are relaxed and comfortable with what they do and own. It is quite clear that these
kind
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kinds
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 of
people
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 are incompetent.
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, if their peers manage to accomplish their academics they are not moved or have the
eager
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 to do the same in view of the fact that they do not value
change
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.
Things
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 like exploring, travelling,
discovering
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and discovering
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 new
things
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 are not their cup of tea since they are satisfied with their routines.
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, there are others who advocate that changes are beneficial. In
own
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our own
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 way of thinking, challenges may push us to become better and learn how to familiarize
with
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ourselves with
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 many unexpected situations. These
people
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 strive to improve their lifestyle and how they think and do
things
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. Travelling and doing different activities is simply amazing for it enhances our knowledge, we learn more from travelling seeing places we have never seen, participating in activities that
helps
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help
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 to be able to solve problems and learn new skills. Experiencing several beliefs and customs might help them to become open-minded. To conclude,
though
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both opinions have effective arguments. I believe that
change
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 is an amazing thing in
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 21st century. It is essential to develop and acquire a skill, habit or quality.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • routine
  • comfort
  • familiarity
  • fear
  • unknown
  • resistance
  • negative consequences
  • security
  • adaptability
  • growth
  • development
  • excitement
  • experiences
  • personal
  • professional
  • resilience
  • positive outcomes
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