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More and more plastic is polluting the city, countryside and ocean. What are the problems caused by plastic waste? What measures should be taken to solve these problems?

#plastic #city #countryside #ocean #waste #measures
Nowadays ,
its
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like people can'
t
 live without a telephone.
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which
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this
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 it
is consider
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is considered
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that
phone
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the phone
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 is the greatest invention of the
last
 century. I agree with
this
 statement. just
becuase
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because
of
this
 invention, the lives of people
has
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 become easier.
Eventhough
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Even though
, it has
given
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negative
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a negative
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 impact on the coming generation.
Firstly
 ,
lets
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let's
let us
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 talk about the thing without which people can'
t
 live nowadays. A telephone
provide
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alot
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a lot
of facilities.
This
 invention
help
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the
long distance
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 relation to
excit
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exit
excite
. The
splited
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split
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families can keep
contact
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in contact
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 with each
others
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other
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 and do video calls.
Moreover
 , it will make us remind about the important dates and things. The
moblie
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mobile
can feed all our needed contacts and photos which are close to us.
Although
 users don'
t
 need to
remamber
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remember
all the numbers and keep prints of the photos.
For example
 , earlier we used to keep a
dariy
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diary
dairy
to note down the numbers of the relatives.
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our drawers will be filled with albums of pictures.
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the electronic device have come
in
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the hands of
public
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the public
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 they find free places in
house
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the house
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 . These are the basic things which the users enjoy.
Inadditional
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In addition
, now the device
provide
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provides
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a lot of facilities. There are many applications which would make
publics
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public
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 life easier. The version of
the
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apply
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phones
are
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is
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 changing day by day.
in
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the meanwhile, mankind doesn'
t
 need to go out for anything. Because the application
in
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on
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 the cell
phone
 would bring everything to the
door steps
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doorsteps
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. Individuals can transfer money to others, can order food, apply
of
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for
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 exams, pay bills, do shopping sitting at home, etc.
Such
 as
,
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apply
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 Google Pay, Uber Eats, Amazon, Flipkart, etc. There are
furthermore
 use of the cell
phone
 ,
it
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helps in finding the location. That means we will never get lost in the
mid way
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.
However
 , human beings are getting used to these
faclities
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facilities
.
Also
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,
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individuals find
problem
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problems
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 without the device.
To conclude
,
the
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apply
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moblie
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mobile
phones are
usefull
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useful
for
mankinds
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mankind
 and
it
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they
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 make life better. With a
divce
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device
human begin can
servive
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service
survive
like anything.
This
 would give direction in an unknown place and even if there is no money the
phone
 can do a lot for us.

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