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New parents should attend parenting courses to ensure the growth of their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#parents #courses #growth #children
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When people start a family, they may not be experienced and need to attend some parenting classes to deal with their
children
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 correctly. In my opinion, these
courses
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 are beneficial for new
parents
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 to up bring their
children
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.
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 we are living in a computer age, and it is easy to find a huge amount of information on the Internet, in some developing countries there are some
parents
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 who do not have an access to the technology or do not know how to use it a computer or other IT devices. In these cases, they might not know how to grow their
children
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 to improve their abilities and aptitudes.
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, there are some talented
children
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 whose
parents
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 do not know how to discover their interests. In fact, by participating in
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 parental classes,
parents
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 will be taught many important tips regarding
develop
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 their
children
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/s brains and skills.
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, these classes introduce age-
apropriate
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appropriate
 toys and activities. Apart from skills and talents,
children
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/s
personality
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 and mental health are critical. these
courses
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 help
parents
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 to grow up healthy
children
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. It is clear that
children
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 misconduct or may have some conflicts with their siblings or
parents
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. There are many
parents
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 who do not know how to cope with and punish their
children
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about
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 their mistakes.
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, parental
courses
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 guide them effectively.
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, some
children
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 are
joulous
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jealous
about
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 their younger siblings ,and they do not want to share
their
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 belongs with them.
parents
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 will know how to solve these problems. To sum up, these
courses
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 are helpful to
parents
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, especially new
parents
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 who are inexperienced. I believe that governments should assign a budget to hold parental
courses
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 to bring up a physically and mentally healthy generation .
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