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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advice about finding a place to love. Writr an email to your friend. In your email Describe where you would lived when you were a student at the university. Recommend the best what from him/her to look accommodation. Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation.

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Dear Kamal, I hope you are doing well. It is great to hear that, you are going to start your higher studies at the same university. I would like to say, I was a student 2 years ago and during my study
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 I lived in Kandy town. The place was located
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within
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 walking distance
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 the university.
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was be
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 able to reduce my travelling cost. I would like to recommend the place,
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where
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 I
was stayed
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. The
hostel
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 name is 'New boys hostel' in
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 street.
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, they offered me
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several
option
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such
 as
single
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 room or
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 room. Apart from that, you will be able to have meals,
laundry
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a laundry
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 facility and transport if
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required.
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, you must be careful when choosing
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 correct hostel. Because some places are very far from the university and some places will not offer other facilities as I mentioned. If you are willing to stay at my place, you can contact them over the phone. Their contact number is 11223344. Thank you Your friend Nimal P
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