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Nowadays, individuals are taking their families abroad with them on every business trip.　What are the advantages and disadvantages for individuals and their families? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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People trying to involve their family in their
business
tour
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tours
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 are very common today.
This
 has so many positives as well as negatives too. In my ,opinion it is not a good way of practice as it could distract the person from concentrating on their
work
 and
also
 irritate the family member with boring meetings.
This
 way of carrying a loved one through their way will improve the affection of their relationship by forming a sense of caring. And
also
 it is a channel for developing a standard knowledge in their
business
 through interactions.
For instance
,once in an interview, Mr Mukesh Ambany states that, flies with his family which influenced
then
to
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involved
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be involved
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 in his
business
.
On the other hand
, it may distract the man from his
work
 because he has to care about two tasks. There is a chance of losing his complete concentration on the meet which could result in the failure of the project.
Furthermore
, they may get bored due to the busy scheduled
work
 or with the silent environment there. They became unable to enjoy the trip. To sum up with,
although
 there are several factors that may come up with
this
 topic, in my opinion, it is always better to do a
business
 trip alone
thus
 could improve concentration on
work
 as well as never make others boring with our schedule.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural exposure
  • Logistical challenges
  • Educational opportunities
  • Financial cost
  • Adaptability
  • Family unity
  • Cultural shock
  • Broadened horizons
  • Disruption
  • Distraction
  • Support network
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