It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society.
According to the statement given above which is saying that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as
this
is best both for the individual and for society. I agree and disagree on
the statement. Youth of today are encouraged to marry at an early Change preposition
with
age
because for an example if we look at Add an article
the man
man
at an early Fix the agreement mistake
men
age
they are angaged
more into sexual activities which Correct your spelling
engaged
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leads
leeds
to having Correct your spelling
leads
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sexuall
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sexual
sexually
intercorce
with multiple partners Correct your spelling
intercourse
therefore
which will Correct your spelling
lead
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to Change the capitalization
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leads
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aids and other deadly diseases ,So making them Correct your spelling
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to
marry will make them Change the verb form
apply
to
stick to one partner.lookingChange the verb form
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, on the other hand,
on the other hand
we not that girls have more peer pressure which will leed them to un wanted
pregnancy so as to Correct your spelling
unwanted
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some they will abort making it difficult for them in the feature to convince again. Some making
it difficult to raise the kids alone since there Wrong verb form
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won't
be
no support to raise the child from the other parent so I find it very wise to marry at an early Change the verb form
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age
to avoid such
problems in the feature
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future
Moreover
marring
at an early Correct your spelling
marrying
age
has more challenges especially in our country because of economic challenges one becomes independent at the age
of 34 years. Some of the people that marry Early does
not respect marriage which will cause a problem Correct subject-verb agreement
do
to
the society some Change preposition
in
they
are not mature enough leading to a lot of Correct pronoun usage
apply
divorce
and in the long run which will affect children as they grow in conclusion to the statement above they Change to a plural noun
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a benefit and they is a disadvantage.Change the verb form
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite