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People are surrounded by advertising, which has an increasing effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this outweigh the negative effects?

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Whether it is on TV,
internet
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, radio or
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on hoardings
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at
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 the side of the road,
advertisements
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 have become a part of our lives. While there are certain drawbacks, I believe that the beneficial effects of
ads
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 are far more. The
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 benefit of
advertisements
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 is that they provide information on new
products
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. If it were not for electronic and print advertising, many
products
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 would not be bought. In
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 way, advertising provides an important service to manufacturers and some consumers.
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,
ads
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 have a positive
effect
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 on the world economy as they help create more jobs. Advertising increases the demand for
products
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 and services, so more
people
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 are needed to manufacture, supply, ship and test them.
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,
advertisements
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 help make
people
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 make healthy choices and live
a
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apply
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better life.
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,
ads
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 for pulse polio immunization, clean drinking water, nutritious diets and exercise etcetera have a positive
effect
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 on
people
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's health and
reduces
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reduce
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 their risk of diseases.
Ads
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 bring about many positive social changes like curbs on female foeticide, equal rights for women and reduction of child labour.
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,
advertisements
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 have a positive
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 on the environment as they educate consumers about serious threats like climate change and steps that can be taken to address
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them
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.
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, adverts
also
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 have some downsides. The main drawback is that sometimes consumers buy these tempting
products
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 without the insight
of
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into
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 what they actually need.
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 impulsive buying can upset
people
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's budgets and land them in debt. Another negative
effect
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 of
advertisements
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 is that they promote harmful
products
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 or misrepresent
products
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 and make false claims about them.
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, fast food
ads
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 have led to poor eating habits and an increase in problems like obesity and diabetes To conclude,
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 there are certain drawbacks of adverts, I still consider their impact on society to be positive on the whole. Play
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • purchasing decisions
  • impulsive buying
  • materialism
  • economic growth
  • competition and innovation
  • personal finances
  • information dissemination
  • misleading information
  • cultural norms
  • societal values
  • diversity
  • social causes
  • stereotypes
  • unrealistic standards
  • psychological effects
  • mental fatigue
  • stress
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