Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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It has been observed that there is
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fixed retirement
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the pension facility too. From my viewpoint,
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of workers who should be
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privilege. From my perspective, some organisations require the young generation over the older generation.
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companies scout young talent and train them to play.
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, considering the physical fitness a player could perform well till the
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of thirty-five.
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, it is vital for them to retire around that
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to bolster their own health. Some well-known players get
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to coach the
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not everyone gets
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job.
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, early life
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monetary
support with retirement will help them to support their family.
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, there are many sets of workers who should be allowed to leave the company early and receive the pension amount.
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, crew members from the aviation industry. They are on their toes and cater
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customers. They may not be agile later in their life to continue doing
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work.
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, army employees should be eligible as they are under
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constant
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willingly retire.
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, drivers who are attached to behemoth companies like Ola or
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Uber
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age
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because some
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could later have poor eyesight leading to accidents. To summarise, many
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organisations
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organisations
demand workers with fitness and their ability to work may reduce with their
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. It's cardinal to support
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employees by honouring them with an early retirement plan and
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sum of money.
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, individuals from the aviation industry, army and drivers should avail
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facility.
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