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Should the government pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the university?

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Governmental duties
such
 as free
university
education
 are controversial issues. Some say that it is one of the duties of all governments to spend
money
 on it because it is a priority for the
society
 and some say that free
education
 should only be provided for beginners to high school students and the
money
 for
university
education
 should be devoted to other critical issues
such
 as healthcare system. In
this
,
the
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essay I am going to discuss both sides' opinions and give my own. On the one hand, some people believe that free
university
education
 for all who are willing brings equality and helps
society
 to develop. They believe that the profit of
this
 investment overweighs its costs for
society
 and it should be done.
On the other hand
, some say that free
education
 is only necessary for limited grades. As
society
 faces many problems
such
 as health and environmental issues and the budget is limited, Every dollar
that is
 spent on free
university
education
 means that other priorities are ignored and would run out of
money
 so
this
 investment's drawbacks, overweigh its advantages. I agree that deciding about free
university
education
 is not an easy task and it needs experts' opinions. But, personally, I believe that no one should be limited to a
university
education
 due to a lack of
money
. If governments are not able to provide free
university
education
, they should consider aids like loans that could be afforded by students and they can
be pay
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 it back in a long-term period after graduation.
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