In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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, violence and crimes. There are some areas in
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States where youngsters below the age of
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by parents or
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available at the price of Candy and due to poverty
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increasing day by day. For, instance 14 years old youngster go addicted to
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because his father denied him to give money and he got depressed and due to bad
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friends
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friends
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and taking
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, our government is implementing rules for our
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of security of teen groups
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will be unemployed,
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will be inefficient and
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the economy will be in debts. For, instance if
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nothing. To conclude the restriction and control of
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important because the
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in their hands and to guide them properly we are the one responsible. So the rule of youngsters not going out in dark will be
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helpful
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society
and individuals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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