MANUFACTURING OF SUGAR FROM SUGAR CANE TAKE A LOT STEPS DO YOU AGREE OR NOT?

THIS
IS A PICTORIAL REPRESENTATION OF PRODUCING THE
SUGAR
FROM THE
SUGAR
CANE THROUGH A SERIES OF 7 MAJOR STEPS.
INITIALLY
,THE
SUGAR
CANE ARE CULTIVATED FOR 12 TO 18 MONTHS DEPENDING ON THE VARIETY OF THE SEEDS USED.BY
THEN
IT IS READY TO BE HARVESTED.THERE ARE TWO WAYS
HARVEST
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.ONE OF THE
METHOD
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IS BY THE HELP OF HARVESTERS WHILE
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OTHER
BEING
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IS
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BY MANUAL LABOUR. THE METHOD USED CAN DEPEND ON THE SCALE OF PRODUCTION AS WELL AS THE FINANCIAL STATUS OF THE FARMER.LATER IS COLLECTED AND TRANSPORTED TO THE CRUSHING SITE WHERE
MACHINE
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THE MACHINE
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GRINDS THESE CANES AND SQUEEZES THE JUICE OUT OF
IT
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THEM
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. AFTER
THIS
STEP , THE RAW JUICE IS PASSED ON TO UNDERGO PURIFICATION THROUGH SPECIALLY DEVELOPED LIMESTONE FILTERS.FOLLOWED BY
THIS
,THE FFILTRATE IS
EVAPOURATED
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EVAPORATED
IN HUGE STEEL CONTAINERS .
THEN
IS CENTRIFUGED TO
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SEPARATE
SEPERATE
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SEPARATE
SUGAR
CRYSTALS FROM THE SYRUP.
FINALLY
, THESE CRYSTALS ARE KEPT
IN
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SUN TO DRY UP.LATER
ON
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THESE ARE
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TRANSFERRED
TRANSFERED
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TRANSFERRED
IN TO
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INTO
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APPROPRIATE PACKETS AND SOLD
IN
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ON
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MARKET
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