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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable. Therefore, all students have to wear school uniform .do you agree or disagree?

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Wearing similar
clothes
 in school has some goals
such
 as alike appearance and more
attention
 to education . I completely agree with uniforms in schools. In
this
 essay, I will explain my reasons for equal cover and appearance in the training environment and
then
 conclude. Nowadays, there are various
clothes
 in terms of colour, the model and even price. Some people believe that schools have to create similar
clothes
 rules that all
students
 wear the same shape
clothes
 with the same material, colour, shape and so on. They think equal appearance will avoid
students
 that pay
attention
 to other things,
for example
, new fashion.
Also
, keeping their financial position
also
 does not reveal their family situation
thus
 their equal figure, prevents them show off because of their wealth or about poorly pupils do not have any concern to provide their new
clothes
.
On the other hand
, similar
clothes
 that opportunity for
students
 tend to create difference among children so they pay
attention
 to education. And school uniforms can provide a sense of support and social
attention
 among the public
for instance
, in Bandar Abbas,
last
 year two
students
 have saved by ordinary citizens because of their
clothes
 when people found a suspicious subject about them and the man that accompanied them. In conclusion, due to all aspects that I mentioned, I am a strict fan of the same
clothes
 in schools, because of very benefit that has for children and parents and helps education atmosphere become simple and help to consider only about their lessons and their relationships without any problems.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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