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TOPIC 6: BUSINESS RESPONSIBILITIES (EDITED) Businesses have always sought to make a profit, though nowadays it is becoming increasingly common to speak about the social obligations that businesses and companies have. I completely agree that businesses have more to do than making money for society.

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TOPIC
 6: BUSINESS RESPONSIBILITIES (EDITED) Businesses have always sought to make a profit, though nowadays it is becoming increasingly common to speak about the social obligations that businesses and companies have. I completely agree that businesses have more to do than making money for society.
TOPIC
 7: PROBLEM AND SOLUTION As it is, in search of a better
life
, a wide majority of
people
 are migrating to the urban areas,
although
life
 in the city can be highly challenging. There is a diversified range of difficulties in the city (high cost of living) and governments can do lots of things to improve urban
life
. (Lowering cost)
TOPIC
 7: PROBLEM AND SOLUTION (EDITED) Cities are mostly seen as a place that has a bunch of inviting opportunities.
While
 it may seem so, there are some drawbacks to living in a large metropolis. There are many things’ governments could do to improve
life
 for average inhabitants.
TOPIC
 8: POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE It is true that many more citizens are living alone more nowadays the in the past. In my opinion,
this
 could be an extremely possible development, and
that is
 because of several compelling reasons (gaining a sense of responsibility.)
TOPIC
 8: POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE (EDITED) In recent years, it has become more common than before for
people
 to live by themselves, more specifically in larger cities in the developed world. I believe that
this
 is a positive trend, as it teaches youngsters, he importance of independence.
TOPIC
 9:
UNIVERSITY
SUBJECTS
 It is true that some
people
 believe that
university
 students should be able to study whatever they want
while
 others believe they should focus and study on
subjects
 that will be crucial for the future, like science and technology. I disagree strongly with
this
 for several reasons (they need to have passion; other jobs are useful as well).
TOPIC
 9:
UNIVERSITY
SUBJECTS
 (EDITED)
People
 have different views about how much choice should students have when it comes to deciding
university
subjects
.
While
 it is argued by some that it would be better for students to be forced into key
subjects
, I believe that it is better for them to choose on their own.
TOPIC
 10: STRONG OPINION It is often said that the best
people
 to talk to teenagers about committing a crime are ex-prisoners who have become good and productive citizens later on. I completely agree,
due to
 several reasons (teenagers listen to them more, they have experienced, they are not members of authority.)
TOPIC
 10: STRONG OPINION (EDITED) It is true that ex-prisoners can become productive. normal members of the society and some believe
that is
 better for them to talk to teenagers about committing crime. I strongly agree with
this
 idea, as teenager swill listen to them more and will be discouraged from breaking the law.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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