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You currently went to a concert and thought one of the singer was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter Say how you feel about his performance Give details of your musical activities. Explain how you would like him to help with your musical activities.

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Dear Mr Kamal, I would like to tell you that, your performance was brilliant at
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 concert at the university. You have sung three songs in three different languages. The way of you
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 on the stage has given more and more energy to the audience. They were more
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excited
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exited
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excited
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 including me.
Additionally
, I would like to say
you
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,
I
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am the president of the music association. I discussed
about
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you with our members and they
also
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 willing to give
fullest
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 support for your future activities.
Moreover
, we are conducting
workshop
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 and practice
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 every weekend.
Although
, it is possible to join
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us if you
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.
Therefore
, I would like to invite you to join
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our music band. The music circle is facilitate all the necessary requirements.
Finally
, I may think it will be
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 opportunity to improve your talents
furthermore
.
Hence
, I am looking forward to a favourable response from your end. Thank You Thank You Yours Sincerely K.L.Nimal Perera (President)
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