Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make their decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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of people believe that if

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allowed their children to make their own decisions turns them

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, others think that it is crucial to have

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ability to make their own choices

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in their curiosity and self-confidence among adolescents. On the one side, adults who think that adolescent should have their own choices in daily life claim it gives them confidence.

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become an able member of society, as they know the actual path

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success.

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, the younger generation becomes independent soon. In

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the cognitive developments and communicative milestones in

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generation depend on their ability to make decisions. I do believe making selections is

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part of our life

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, children should learn at their

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stage of upbringing as result they going to be ready to play crucial roles in their society. On the other side of

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debate, in some people’s

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everyday matter decisions causes selfish personality.

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occasion they

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to understand themselves only and

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they would become lose the capability to realize other personal tastes.

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, they may have

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to enjoy their music with

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voice regardless of respect for the rights of other citizens or,

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clothes that do not conform to social norms and situations simply because they love the clothes and decide to wear them. I truly believe that with practical and supportive education we can overcome the egoist issues and at the same time give them self-assured sense. In conclusion, some people have the idea that if children have their own wishes, turns

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selfish and egoistic person.

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making own choices helps teenagers grow up and accept efficient roles in their society.