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Many people think that home cooked food is healthy, but many people still prefer eating out. Why is this so? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#people #home #food #support
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Nowaday
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, most
of
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people
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 are usually eating outside because it will get more convenient than cooking themselves at home.
Moreover
, there is
more
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a more
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 comfortable way called
food
 delivery which is suitable for
people
 who do not want to go outside or
avoiding
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 other
people
 during the
pendemic
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pandemic
 period. In my opinion, both ways
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 on lifestyle.
For instance
,
people
 who
cook
 at home
by
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 their own must have enough time preparing
staffs
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staff
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 to
cook
 or think about what the meals for that day is, what should they do and going shopping at the market, it is quite a waste of time for me.
However
, cooking at home can make sure that you choose the best kind of
food
 and stuffs you like.
Thus
, when I have free time I would
loved
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love
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 to
cook
 by myself and helping other family members
for
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with
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ingrediant
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ingredient
ingredients
 preparation
on
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for
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 my
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country
country's
coutry
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country
 national holiday.
On the other hand
, if you
cook
 with
an unhealthy
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unhealthy food
a portion of unhealthy food
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food
, bad
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ingredients
ingrediants
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ingredients
 that are not good for your health too. On
this
 day, there are a lot of healthy
food
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restaurants
restuarants
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restaurants
 around the town which is
a
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multiple
choices
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 for you to select. In
conclude
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, it
is depend
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depends
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 on the situation and lifestyle. Your life, your choice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast-paced
  • convenience
  • gourmet experience
  • cuisines
  • replicate
  • socialize
  • festive atmosphere
  • glamorized
  • cost-effective
  • groceries
  • budget-friendly
  • loyalty programs
  • delivery services
  • diverse dining options
  • eating habits
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