People have little understanding of the importance of natural world. What are the reasons for this? How can people learn more about natural world?

In
this
modern
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, people
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young generations are not enough to understand the
essential
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essence
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of
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environment
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
, Not only around us but
also
all
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world
. In
this
essay, I am about to give multiple reasons and suggest several possible solutions for
this
problem. One of the primary
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reasons
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reasosn
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reasons
for
this
problem is people thinking that knowing a lot of knowledge about the natural
world
which
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is not necessary.
Human
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Humans
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live in the past century; their
live
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depended on the
environment
, so they saw the vital of
natural
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the natural
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world
and how to
kept
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and protected the
environment
best possible way.
However
, many people in
this
century live in artificial habitats, they are satisfied with their lives, so they cannot realise the importance of the natural
world
.
In addition
, there are many defects
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education
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system. The lessons at school just point
in
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another aspects
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; the knowledge about
environment
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the environment
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is
abondoned
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abandoned
. They cannot experience
practically
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it practically
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, so they do not have
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the chances
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chances
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to know
that
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what happened to the natural
environment
. There are
some
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several answers which can solve
this
problem.
Firstly
, the government should
compines
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companies
combines
green space in the cities.
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have opportunities to live closer
with
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to
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environment
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the environment
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in order that they are grateful
many
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for many
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wonder
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things which the
world
brought to them.
Secondly
, schools push on to educate children,
students
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and students
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about the crucial of
natural
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the natural
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world
,
provide
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and provide
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plenty of
environment
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environmental
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documents
such
as videos,
photographs
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and photographs
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about global
environment
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problems
such
as climate change or extinction in order to elevate their cognition about the serious natural
world
problems.
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