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Some people believe that new buildings should be built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that new construction should be of conventional
style
. I partially agree with the given statement for several reasons.
This
 essay will describe my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, people should follow the building construction
style
 in the traditional
style
. It gives a nice look to a city.
For instance
, In Amritsar maha Singh market is built in a traditional
style
 which is
also
 an attraction for tourists. Nowadays, the young generation gets influenced by traditional
buildings
 and
then
 they survey their conventional
buildings
. There are some reasons for not building conventional
buildings
.
Firstly
, the population is increasing day by day. So, there is no more space to build conventional
buildings
. Traditional
buildings
 take more space and they prefer to make flats or vertical
buildings
.
Secondly
, it is expensive to build traditional
buildings
 and
also
 there is a need for craftsmen who is difficult to find these days. To conclude, I partially agree that there is a need to build conventional
buildings
 but there are some reasons
such
 as lack of space and craftsmen. So, it is difficult to make traditional
buildings
 in cities.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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