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the information about buying coffee and tea and drinking habit of people in five various Australian cities.

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The table depicts the outcomes of a
questionare
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questionnaire
question
 of how often people buy and drink
a
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different types of
coffee
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 in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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 of Australia. The
first
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 option is
bought
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 fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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 4
weeks
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.
In
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Sydney
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 has 45.7 per
cent
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 of
city
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residents
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 and has almost the same amount as
Melbourne
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 which is 42.2 per
cent
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. Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 have
a
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nearly
same
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 amount, 34.2 per
cent
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 and 34.4 per
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.
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Hobart
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 has 38.3 per
cent
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. The
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 line is bought instant
coffee
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last
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Brisbanehas
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Brisbane has
Brisbane
 52.6 per
cent
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.
Other
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 two cities that have
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almost
most
amost
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almost
 the same
number
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 are
Adelaide
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, 49.8 per
cent
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, and
Melbourne
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, 48.3 per
cent
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. The lowest
number
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 is 45.5 per
cent
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of
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Sydney
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 and The highest
number
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 is 54.1 per
cent
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of
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Hobart
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. The
last
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 option of the survey shows the percentage of
city
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residents
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 that went to a
cafe’
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cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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. In
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sydney
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, people went to a
cafe’
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cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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 61 per
cent
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 of
city
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residents
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. In Brisbane, citizens went to a
cafe’for
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cafe for
coffee
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of
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or
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tea
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last
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 55.4 per
cent
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. The lowest is
Adelaide
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that
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 shows 49.9 per
cent
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 of
city
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residents
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. In
Hobart
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, people went to a cafe’ for
coffee
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of
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or
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tea
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last
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62.7
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by 62.7
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cent
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. The highest is
Melbourne
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that
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 shows 63.3 per
cent
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. In conclusion, the highest
number
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 of the survey is the percentage of
city
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residents
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 that went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 because
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it
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is
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 shows almost the highest percentage in 3 types.
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