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Some people trust their first impressions about a person’s character because they believe theses judgements are generally correct. Other people don’t judge a person’s character quickly because they believe first impressions are wrong. Get ready to talk to an examiner about this issue

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While some people trust their primary
feelings
 about an individual’s personality because they argue these judges are totally accurate, others do not judge a person’s personality rapidly because they believe
first
 impressions are not correct. In the following paragraphs, I shall explain
this
 subject. On the one hand, primary
feelings
 are referred to previous experiences which everyone had experienced in the span of their life.
That is
 to say, people usually judge new persons at the
first
 sight by their old observations in face of various people from a particular society.
For instance
, they acquire some information about youth who get a tattoo on all of their body from their
life
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 environment which
have
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 influenced
on
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their
first
feelings
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 with juveniles with tattoo. So, our
emotions
 that emerge by a glance at someone actually are
collection
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 of observations and experiences which not only shape our
mind
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 about our surroundings
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 but
also
, have
influence
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 on our
judgements
.
On the other hand
, as our
emotions
 are in
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mutual
relation
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 with our hormones, it may impact
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our
judgements
.
In other words
, our
judgements
 can be wrong due to changes in our inner metabolism.
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, if
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 be in
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 period, their
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 will impact
on
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behaviours that can lead to mistakes for
judgements
 at a glance.
Moreover
, a vast amount of Hyman’s
emotions
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 unconsciousness. In short, our
feelings
 are not understandable
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 ourselves that
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 makes them unreliable. Because they do not have any reasonable reasons. In conclusion,
although
, people’s
first
emotions
 about others may be correct sometimes, these impressions are not suitable sources to judge someone rapidly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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