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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #world
Language
 is a significant part of
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modern society. Nowadays we often hear about
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the disappearing
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disappearing
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 of some
languages
. According to some people, rare
languages
 are not crucial for our modern life. They consider that speaking
of
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the
some
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most important
languages
 can be enough for communication between people.
This
 essay shows some advantages and disadvantages of
this
 opinion from
culture
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cultural
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 and
economical
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prospectives
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perspectives
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.
First
 of all, a
language
 and a
culture
 are connected and impact each
others
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.
Culture
 shows the mentality of society through
their
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language
 and traditions. Without
language
 can not be a
culture
 and it means that one nation might be lost all their habits, inventions, and
at
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 the end their history and future.
For instance
, the invasion of Europe to South and North America has led to the extinction of
Maya
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the Maya
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 and Inca
empire
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 and their
languages
 as well.
Also
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 all
languages
 are significant
for
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 the
world
 and their significant part. They show us the diversity of our society and make our
world
 colourful. When we have only
few
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languages
 it means we have only
few
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 perspectives and ideas for making our life better.
For example
, while the different nations are exchanging their
languages
the
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 become more creative and can solve some problems easier.
On the other hand
, just
few
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languages
 in the
world
 can be beneficial for international companies.
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The
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 can easily
to
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deal with their
parthers
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partners
 and it can
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help
hepl
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help
 them run their business more productive.
For example
,
English
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language
 has become the international
language
 and it is a major subject in
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most
of
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schools around the
world
. It has been easier today to learn just one
language
 in order to promote your career chances. All in all, there are as positives as negatives sides of
languages
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 extinction. I
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believe
beleive
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believe
 that the negative aspects of
this
 problem are
at
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 the
first
 place. In my
opinion
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 we should not allow
to lose
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our
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 diversity and
unique
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uniqueness
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 of
the
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each
language
 and nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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