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‘The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools.’ How far do you agree with this prediction?

#‘the #internet #course #books #schools #prediction
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In our modern
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 some individuals reckon that the course books will never be replaced by the
internet
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 web in schools. I completely disagree with
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 statement and I think that the
internet
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 will replace traditional books in
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 future.
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internet
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 is more
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convenient
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 and more comfortable for students than schoolbooks.It can provide useful tools and specs for studying.According to Kazakhstan national organisation survey, 91 per cent of students in Kazakhstan agreed that
network
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 is better
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use for them. Students explained that the books are
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heavier and not as flexible as
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,
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 can provide more useful data and give more
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convenient
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convenient
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 rather than textbooks.
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, the
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 has good prospects in the future with
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 increase
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 information. In today's
world
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 almost anything is connected to the network and education is not an exception. All fields are moving towards online working and learning. Programmers and
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this
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 field will
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network more and more comfortable in use and experts from different fields will increase
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 of useful information drastically. According to analyst Michael Newman from Stanford University, education will completely transfer into
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 format in 2030,
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 means that all textbooks will be totally replaced by
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. To conclude, I strongly believe that the
internet
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 is
better
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 solution for education, because it is more advantageous and beneficial for
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student
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, with
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prospect
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 of improvement.
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