Many people join online learning programs and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree? Use good reasons and examples

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Nowadays,
students
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have a
lot
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opportunities to choose where to
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the courses. Some
students
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want to learn the
classes
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from
home
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, but
other
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others
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think that learning from
home
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will get less benefit from studying at
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.
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statement will clarify
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both thoughts and show my opinion. On the one hand,
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a study
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study
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studying
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from
home
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will
makes
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students
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get more comfortable because they are in their
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zone.
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, it will
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the stress
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the
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.
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, some children have stress from teachers and some
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that they
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.
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,
students
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could pay less attention
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classes
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because they can play games or watch
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videos
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from
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on
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internet
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the internet
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while the teachers are teaching.
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, they can
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the exam during the test.
On the other hand
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,
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from
school
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is a good
opportunities
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for
students
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. They will get to know their friends and will get to learn
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their
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passive
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skill
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that
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did not teach.
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,
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study
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studying
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onsite will give benefit than
study
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online because when the
students
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do not understand in the class, the
teaches
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teachers
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can clarify what they do
no
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not
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understand. According to the scientist, they said "
study
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onsite is better than
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study
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studying
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online because it will make
student
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students
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enjoy
about
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apply
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school
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and less the stress that
students
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have." In my opinion, I totally agree that attending
to
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classes
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at
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college
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collage
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college
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will give more
benefit
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benefits
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to the
students
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more
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apply
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than
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study
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studying
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online. From experience, I had to learn at
home
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because of the Coronavirus, But it turns out not as good as I expected, I do not get to see my friends and teachers.
In
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this
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situation told me that learning at
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is fun and more
enjoy
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enjoyable
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than
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study
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studying
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online.
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