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The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is too raise age limit for younger drivers. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, the
age
 for driving should be increased for road protection. I strongly agree with the statement owing to the reasons given below.
First
 of all, by increasing the
age
 one can reduce traffic or road accidents.Youngsters drive harshly to show off thereby creating injuries.Due to impulsive behaviour, rules and regulations may not be followed creating hazards to others.
For instance
, as per newspaper reports about
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2 percent
accidents
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 are by teenagers. Young drivers are not mature enough to handle the consequences of careless driving.
Therefore
 by raising the
age
 the government can make sure that rules are strictly followed.
Secondly
, older drivers have experiences in life and can handle any emergencies in
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 short run than the youth.
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 young generation violates rules and laws.
Thus
 increasing
age
 would help safety. In my personal opinion than increasing
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all group should follow laws for better protection. To conclude, older generations have experiences and will follow laws thereby reducing road accidents compared to the younger generation.
Thus
 I agree
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 the statement.
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