Some people believe that non academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate only on academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Education,
specially
academic Replace the word
especially
courses
play
the most vital role in the development of a country. Due to Correct subject-verb agreement
plays
this
, the youngsters are getting forced to achieve their academics. Some of the multitudes believes
that non-academic Change the verb form
believe
subjects
should be abolished by which
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that
students
can focus entirely on their academic courses
. I agree partially to
Change preposition
with
this
statement and reasons
behind my opinion will be explained as well as concluded in upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, the given statement Correct article usage
the reasons
targates
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targeted
targets
students
, schools as well as parents. Due to addition
of new Correct article usage
the addition
subjects
, kids are being pressurised,quite more, to perform well in added courses
too. This
can also
result in decreasing scores in academic subjects
. On the same hand, this
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these
subjects
also
forces
the administration of the academies to maintain and upgrade their infrastructure and Change the verb form
force
equipments
which are needed to teach Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
such
subjects
which affect the financial health of parents due to rise
in academic charges. Correct article usage
the rise
For example
, if a school
adds up swimming as an
non-academic subject, it will charge Change the article
a
school
for pool, Add an article
the school
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maintenance
maintainance
, costumes as well as trainers, which pressures the Correct your spelling
maintenance
school
to rise
the fees.
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raise
On the other hand
, the extra activities in school
can result in betterment
of interest of Add an article
the betterment
students
regarding
schools. It can produce and develop new skills among Change preposition
in
students
which can help and support them later in the
life. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, if a
Correct the article-noun agreement
students
a student
students
had learnt cooking in school
, they will never get any worry regarding
baking and cooking. The add-on Change preposition
about
courses
can also
prove some students
which are not interested in the
studies Change the word
their
but
can perform well in these. The Correct word choice
apply
subjects
like G.K. , Moral
science Correct word choice
and Moral
also
belongs
to Correct subject-verb agreement
belong
this
category which updates the kid regarding current trends and researches
too.
To Conclude, Fix the agreement mistake
research
this
statement needs to reorganised
as the schools must not burden the young ones with the add-on Add a missing verb
be reorganised
courses
. They must understand the Interest of each individual and provide the best suited
subject to them which will result in a little rise Add a hyphen
best-suited
of
payable amount from parentsChange preposition
in
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite