Some people believe that non academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate only on academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Education,
specially
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academic
courses
play
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the most vital role in the development of a country. Due to
this
, the youngsters are getting forced to achieve their academics. Some of the multitudes
believes
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that non-academic
subjects
should be abolished by
which
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that
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students
can focus entirely on their academic
courses
. I agree partially
to
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this
statement and
reasons
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the reasons
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behind my opinion will be explained as well as concluded in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the given statement
targates
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targeted
targets
students
, schools as well as parents. Due to
addition
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the addition
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of new
subjects
, kids are being pressurised,quite more, to perform well in added
courses
too.
This
can
also
result in decreasing scores in academic
subjects
. On the same hand,
this
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these
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subjects
also
forces
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the administration of the academies to maintain and upgrade their infrastructure and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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which are needed to teach
such
subjects
which affect the financial health of parents due to
rise
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the rise
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in academic charges.
For example
, if a
school
adds up swimming as
an
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non-academic subject, it will charge
school
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for pool,
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maintenance
maintainance
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maintenance
, costumes as well as trainers, which pressures the
school
to
rise
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raise
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the fees.
On the other hand
, the extra activities in
school
can result in
betterment
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of interest of
students
regarding
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schools. It can produce and develop new skills among
students
which can help and support them later in
the
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life.
For example
, if
a
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students
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students
had learnt cooking in
school
, they will never get any worry
regarding
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baking and cooking. The add-on
courses
can
also
prove some
students
which are not interested in
the
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studies
but
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apply
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can perform well in these. The
subjects
like G.K. ,
Moral
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and Moral
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science
also
belongs
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to
this
category which updates the kid regarding current trends and
researches
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too. To Conclude,
this
statement needs to
reorganised
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as the schools must not burden the young ones with the add-on
courses
. They must understand the Interest of each individual and provide the
best suited
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subject to them which will result in a little rise
of
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payable amount from parents
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