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Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a no-brainer to say that illegal activities are becoming more in
this
 sophisticated era. It is often argued that increasing the number of
police
 officers is the foremost option to mitigate crimes. But I strongly disagree with
this
 view.
This
 essay comprises the reasons behind my disagreement; followed by a logical conclusion. On the one hand, nowadays most
of
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the offenders are inclined towards cyber-crimes which are unable
to reduce
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 by having more detectives on the roads.
This
 is because almost all internet-based illegal activities are performed virtually, but not physically.
For example
, recent research conducted by the Indian Ministry of Defense revealed that their
offense
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 rate is increased by 10% in 2022,
although
 they are having more than enough checkpoints.
This
 is mainly due to the fact that cyber-crimes.
Hence
, it is difficult to minimize the
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 by just having more
police
 guards on the streets.
On the other hand
, without developing a proper
education
 it is hard to make a crime-free society, In spite of having enough road
police
. To elucidate, good manners and
behaviors
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 make people better.
For instance
, In Finland,
although
 cops are extremely rare on the roads,
it
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is one of the top-ranked crime-free countries in the world.
This
 is by reason of, all children develop with standardized
education
 which makes them more responsive to their nation.
Therefore
, lack of
education
 leads to more crimes despite having more policemen. To conclude, I am completely against the given statement, due to the fact that, cyber-crimes and improper
education
 will increase unlawful activities,
although
 there is a plethora of
police
 on the streets.
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