There are many extinct animals’ species in the world. Some people think we should protect animals from dying out, while others believe we should spend more time on problems of human beings. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It has been universally acknowledged that the number of animal extinctions is escalating at an alarming rate in

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scenario. One school of thought opine that human

being

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beings

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should protect

animals

from dying out,

however

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some other communities argued that people should spend more time on

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the problems

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of human beings.

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essay will not only shed light on both perceptions yet my point of view will

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be elaborated. Commencing with the causes which are responsible for

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growth of it. The reason is that

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the number of

endanger

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endangered

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animals

has been

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suffering

suffuring

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suffering

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the pollution which

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had caused by humanity

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as water

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and air

pollutions

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pollution

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environmental conservationism

believe

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that people should protect

animals

from being

extincted

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extinct

. To cite an example, there are some conservation organisations

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raising awareness to

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from

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trafficking illegally just only for their

disatiable

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insatiable

urges.

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, there will be unbalanced biological circles which can help people to mitigate

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climate change.

On the other hand

, in order to solve

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serious issue, some measures can be taken. Human beings undoubtedly should take

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responsibility to solve

this

severe problem.

Furthermore

, waste disposals and toxic emissions from massive industries are contaminating the river and sea. To exemplify, marine

animals

will be accidentally consuming plastics as their

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Consequently

, there will be more and more

animals

extincted

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extinct

in future. To conclude, according to my perspective,

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problematic issue has become depressing magnitude.

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this

Worldwide

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effort is crucial in order to curb

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grave concern.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Extinction, Endangered species, Conservation, Habitat, Ecosystem, Biodiversity, Ethical responsibility, Preservation, Ecosystem services, Wildlife protection, Poverty alleviation, Healthcare, Climate action, Resource allocation, Food security, Interconnectedness, Sustainable development

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