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ome people think that young people should follow the traditions of the society. Others think young people are free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (Culture)

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One of the most controversial issues today is whether adolescents should observe the common norms in our community. In
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 matter. For young
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, it would be difficult to make their own decision because of a lack of experience in
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. One of the reasons why is that they have little opportunity to communicate with adults outside of their families. Most young
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 spend less time
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 social circles and may focus more on their close friends. During the period of adolescence, their perception of
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 is developing into an adult, so learning about the traditional practices of their community is necessary to a certain extent.
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, the pace of social changes is rapidly faster due to developing technologies for several years. To adapt to the change in
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,
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 needed to change their common knowledge flexibly. Take
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 a rural area in Japan, only elderly members can take part in a neighbourhood association meeting, but a young generation especially women, cannot participate there. For elderly
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, it is a traditional custom to attend only close members in a council.
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, with the advent of the ageing
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, the participation of young
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 would play an important key role in political activities in the countryside.
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, there are both positive and negative points: young
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 obey traditional customs in their community or do their own way.
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 including adults and elderly
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 have more responsibility for their own behaviour because their way of thinking is expected to set an example to the younger generation.
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