Nowadays on-line shopping has become more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.
THESE DAYS THE INTERNET HAVE TAKEN THE SHOPPING INDUSTRY BY STORM AND INCREASED THE POPULARITY OF
THE
ONLINE SHOPPING.Correct article usage
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THIS
ESSAY DISCUSSES THE ADVANTAGES AS WELL AS
THE DISADVANTAGES BEFORE REACHING A CONCLUSION.
FIRSTLY
,THERE ARE MANY BENEFITS TO THE RECENT BOOM IN THE E-SHOPPING WHICH INCREASED ACCESS TO THE CUSTOMERS ACROSS A WIDE RANGE OF PRODUCTS AND IMPROVED HEALTHY COMPETITION AMONG DIFFERENT COMPANIES ARE THE MOST IMPORTANT ONES.THE TELE-COMMUNICATION
SECTOR HAS IMPROVISED A LOT, Correct your spelling
TELECOMMUNICATION
EVENTUALLY
, IT Correct word choice
AND EVENTUALLY
LEAD
TO A MAJOR ROLE IN IMPROVING THE EXPOSURE OF THE PUBLIC TO THE E-MARKET .Wrong verb form
HAS LED
MOREOVER
, THIS
CHANGE HAS GIVEN A BOOST TO THE EXISTING RACE BETWEEN VARIOUS FIRMS. THUS
,THE CUSTOMERS ARE ABLE TO ENJOY THE BEST PRICES FOR EVERY PRODUCT.FOR EXAMPLE
, A RECENT STUDY CONDUCTED BY THE DEPARTMENT OF COMMERCE OF THE NATIONAL INSTITUTE OF COMMERCE CONCLUDED THAT 50 PER CENT OF BUYERS WHO EARLIER RELIED ON THE
LOCAL SELLERS Correct article usage
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ARE
NO LONGER Verb problem
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PREFERRING
TO DO SO.
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PREFER
SECONDLY
, WE MUST LOOK INTO THE NEGATIVE ASPECTS OF THIS
SHIFT VERY CLOSELY.THE THREAT TO THE SMALL-SCALE BUSINESSES AND THE INABILITY TO EFFECTIVELY MANAGE THE FRAUDSTERS.NOWADAYS THE
LOCAL VENDORS WITH MEDIUM TO SMALL BUDGETS ARE FINDING IT DIFFICULT TO THRIVE Correct article usage
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ALONG WITH
THE ONLINE CORPORATE GIANTS OUT THERE IN THE INDUSTRY.MOST OF THEM ARE FORCED TO SELL THEIR GOODS WITH A THIN MARGIN.AS A RESULT
, THESE SECTORS ARE GETTING BADLY AFFECTED DAY BY DAY. FOLLOWED BY THIS
ARE THE CHALLENGES THAT THE FAKE RACKETS CAUSE THE PEOPLE TO LOSE MONEY VERY OFTEN.FOR INSTANCE
,I HAD A PERSONAL EXPERIENCE WHERE I HAD ORDERED A BRANDED SHIRT BUT WAS CHEATED WITH AN OLD USED DRESS.
TO CONCLUDE
, CHANGE IS SOMETHING INEVITABLE AND SO IS THIS
TREND AS WELL
.THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE OTHERS IF IMPLEMENTED WITH PROPER VISION .THE GOVERNMENTS SHOULD MAKE PROPER LAWS TO PROTECT THE COMMON MAN FROM THE BOTH ASPECTS FOR A BETTER ECONOMY .Rephrase
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task response
The essay partially addresses the prompt. It discusses the benefits and drawbacks of online shopping but lacks a clear stance on whether it is a positive or negative development. The conclusion should clearly indicate the writer's opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a somewhat logical structure but lacks coherence in presenting the ideas. The points are not well-connected, and there is a need for better transition between sentences and paragraphs.