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some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary . Do the advantages outweigh the disavantages?

#experts #children #language #school #disavantages
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Some people are of opinion that learning a non-native
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 primary
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 rather than secondary.
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 there are some
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advantages
advantanges
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advantages
 of learning a
language
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 at an early
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on the other hand
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, there are
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 some disadvantages. We will discuss both the points in detail in the below paragraph. It is said that
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 younger
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, the grasping capacity of a
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 is at its most. I believe, it is important for a
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 to develop new skills like
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a foreign
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 speech at the early stage of education.
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, I have seen many
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the primary
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school
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 of my niece who
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 started learning new speech along with English like French, german along with
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 activities.
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, it helps a
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 to become comfortable in later stages of secondary
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 in
new
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a new
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language
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.
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, there are some
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disadvantages
disadvatages
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disadvantages
, some people believe primary education is too early to study a non-native lingual .
Students
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 in secondary education to understand any new speech & apply them in their daily life.
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, As per
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the recent
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 study, It was concluded that a
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 can learn a new
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 more efficiently in primary
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. To conclude, I believe learning
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 an early
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students
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, there are some disadvantages
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there are
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 some long-term benefits for
students
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 learning early.
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