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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Recently, the debate on whether
universities
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 should provide
skills
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 which are useful in the
workplace
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 has been heated. While some people argue that providing
knowledge
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 which is needed in the
workplace
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 is beneficial for
teenagers
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,
other
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others
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 claim that giving access to
knowledge
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 is the main purpose of
universities
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. As far as I am concerned, learning useful
skills
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 may be the main function of a university. 
To begin
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 with, teaching
skills
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 needed in the
workplace
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 is necessary. As the main purpose for
teenagers
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 to attend
colleges
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 is to obtain a higher job position, exposing students to as much
workplace
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knowledge
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 as they can
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allow them to flourish
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 areas.
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, it may be easier for others to accept graduates’ ideas if effective ways of communication are taught in
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.
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,
teenagers
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 may be encouraged to contribute more which not only
benefit
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 their future careers but
also
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 enhance
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 social development.
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, fundamental principles should be learnt in colleges. Since
teenagers
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 who attended higher institutions may want to apply
jobs
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for jobs
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 which need
further
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knowledge
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, they may expect to learn theoretical concepts about their courses.
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, it is more important for biology medical students to learn
functions
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 of
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 than how to communicate with patients.
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, useful
skills
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workplace
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the workplace
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 may not be as crucial as other theories in colleges. In conclusion,
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 it is crucial for
universities
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 to provide access
of
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to
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knowledge
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 to graduates, it is undeniable that people who attend
universities
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 will get into
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workplace
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 eventually.
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, by providing young adults with
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knowledge
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the knowledge
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 needed
in
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 jobs, more contributions can
be achieve
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 in the future. 
Skills
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 = ability =capacity
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Holistic development
  • Vocational training
  • Industry-specific competencies
  • Critical thinking
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Academic research
  • Intellectual development
  • Ethics and values
  • Societal contribution
  • Job market demands
  • Practical training
  • Internships
  • Knowledge advancement
  • Global challenges
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