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Weddings are more expensive in many countries nowadays when compared to the past . What is the reason behind this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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By providing beneficial services ,
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a citizen
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citizen
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 will have a healthier relationship with their government , which often reflects on other facilities .
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 , supplying a health
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 with modern devices would significantly increase the use of public places rather than private ones. On another hand,spending millions of money on infrastructure ,that can immensely enhance
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publics’
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 lives ,could happen if they put
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massive effort
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 reasonable/effective planning .
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 would be doubled .
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 is simply because citizens have the absolute right to deeply experience that way of life.
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,spending millions of money on infrastructure ,
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 can immensely
immensely
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enchance
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enhance
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publics'
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 lives ,could often happen if
the
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 put a huge effort
in
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 planning .
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 ,increasing the quality of
life's standard
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 would be doubled .
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 because citizens have the absolute
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absolute
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, for low-income patients who hardly have money for living, being able to have free access to health services has successfully affected their financial situation and has opened
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new hope for
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long-lasting life.
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