In some cultures elderly people are highly valued, while in some cultures youth are more valued . Discuss both views

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age group of
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are more valued
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the society, some
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think elderly
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have
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value. In my opinion,
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believe young
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have the same value as the elderly.
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and foremost,
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youth
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are the future and foundation of the country, they are like the blood in a man's body. To be more specific, the world needs the energy of the
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, the society cannot work smooth and efficient without the contribution of young
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. All the elite
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around the world recruit lots of fresh graduates every year, which means they are benefited from the passion and creativity of young
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. If they do not have the appropriate proportion of
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the right positions, the performance of the company certainly would be affected.
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society could not underestimate the achievements
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the
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for the cultures.
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, elderly
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have the same importance as the
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, because their experience and wisdom are crucial,
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the brain in a man's body. Take the case of the highest leader of most countries, they are all elderly
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, which indicates the elderly
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have more advantages
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making decisions or dealing with other
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. If they do not go through the time of working with different tasks, it is
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to make the work
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balance.
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, the world needs
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elderly
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to use their experience in order to give instruction to the
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generation. In conclusion, I believe the young and elderly
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both have advantages, which means they are both equally valued.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reverence
  • wisdom
  • life experience
  • integrate
  • respected
  • innovation
  • progress
  • energy
  • investment
  • harness
  • potential
  • advancement
  • tradition
  • guidance
  • navigated
  • merits
  • tradition
  • adaptability
  • forward-thinking
  • contributions
  • intergenerational
  • respect
  • synergistic
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